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LoL..thats her story. All in this one poem that I invented XD (it sucks yes I know..I dont really know how to make poems..:()
here's the poem (clearer version:XD:)

This is her Story

Selfishness, dishonesty,
this is the life I live with you..
Limping, crawling,
hear my heart it aches to be free..
You restrict me from the world,
you dampen my soul..
Every morning is pathetic,
every night is torture..
While I live everyday,
like a doll mishandled..
You just watch there,
but never know how I really feel..
Well I wouldn't complain,
this is the story of my life..
And everyday as I live by,
i'll wait for the day..
That you'll finally realize,
who I really Am.


yes this is teh poem :XD:
drawing:
time: waa I seriously dont know :XD:
tools: pencil and ballpen (as usual ;))
manipulated with cs ;P

© ~F-AYN-T
P L S C O M M E N T
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:iconstosphia:
The art work is pretty typical of the manga styles, shading is done well, something many manga artists skip on doing more than a suggestion of. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but her eyes look etched, rather than smooth and wet like typical eyes.

At the risk of being mean, your poem is kind of dry and I don't really feel like it speaks to your illustration. I'm also not really certain of what is being critique, so i'll also say this: the print face you use speaks volumes to the tonethat you're trying to convey to your user. I hope this helped :)
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I love it is amazing one of the best poems I had ever seen! I really love the art work it was a little hard to read but the plot made up for the writing.And I also love it becous I am a huge fan of your art as you can see my profile pitchure is coler burst. Overall the poem and the artwork was amazing I loved it! Oh and I disagree with all of the mean reveiws on this amazing poem and artwork! And I think the artwork went perfectly with the story!!!!!!!!! :iconiloveitplz: :iconblushplz: the poem was pretty amazing!!
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:iconiiasoul:
IIASoul Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014
This is very nice
I really love the poem
It is really touching..
<3
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VaridamianGamer Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I recently used your art as a little helper when creating a piece. Thank you. It's surprising how much an artist can improve just by seeing another piece of artwork. :) I couldn't even do shoulders properly until I looked at your piece. :) Thanks again. :3

If you want to see it, "The only part you see..."  It's there.
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DontHoldBack Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
i really do like the handwriting here. poems, i dont really understand though,(im not saying its bad or anything!!!) i just really love the handwriting
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nathalieRawr Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist
Uh this might be an old drawing but I think this poem is amazing, like lyrics from a song.
it's just...dunno. It sort of reached me, the style you wrote it in is very good n.n

/badenglishsorry/
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Pseudowitch Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012
Simple... powerful... and heart warming.
I held on to every word, wanting to embrace the small child, yearning to be noticed and loved for whom she truly is.
For those living a life like this... When you face a door closed shut before you, seek out an open window.
Well Done.
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My eyes have opened but they are obscured by my tears...
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Queen-Skye Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2012
dude , this is kinda what im going through right now . and this actually helped me . thanks :)
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:iconlittlemsholmes1:
littlemsholmes1 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2011  Student General Artist
I think I am going to cry
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SkylerPennington Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, just, wow
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silvaze11223344 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
that is very toughing! ^^*tearjerker!*
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Faerieheart Featured By Owner May 15, 2011
The artwork is WONDERFUL!
The Poem is ... it touches my heart.
I've lived in her world.
I hope she is out of that life now.
:hug:
Huggles, Faerie
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:iconf-ayn-t:
F-AYN-T Featured By Owner May 16, 2011
:hug:
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:iconflatspade:
FlatSpade Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Good gracious, I LOVE IT!!! :)
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:icondoomybears:
DoomyBears Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011
reminds me of the song bad romance, lol, but it is still great :D
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Ambasu Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lol, AWSOME! i think i can relate 2 this...my mother abused me for 11 years....i was her little doll i had 2 do what ever she wanted, i feel the same about You Broke me, lol, so i'm here if u need 2 talk ^w^
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:iconhashsliningslasher97:
i realy luv all te wurk u do BIGGGGGG FAAANNNN :XD:
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:iconamayathecat:
amayaTHEcat Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2010
i can so relate to this
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lansiaraax3 Featured By Owner May 11, 2010
it is wow . ^^ i really like it . ; pp
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:iconanime-crazy666:
anime-crazy666 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2010
no words to discribe this one... (ya, i'm a bit wordless) XD
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kamen-marie Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2010
I adore all your art but this one I find is the best. It is touching, and beautiful.
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:iconf-ayn-t:
F-AYN-T Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2010
thank you : )
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:iconcute-aholic:
cute-aholic Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
wh0a...

nice one :)..
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iRetarded Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010
* Adding on from previous comment.


-=-My Ex. never helped me :L
I guess thats why i ended it "/
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:iconf-ayn-t:
F-AYN-T Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010
:hug:
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iRetarded Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010
Jheeezus..
Whose this based on?

Sounds like something I'd write - about my own life.

Ahh well, i guess it was fate, my mums my mum, and i can never change that :(
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:iconf-ayn-t:
F-AYN-T Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010
Its about me actually, me and my ex > A <
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Miyuki0Sagashite Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2009
Really nice, depth... graphics....artistic writing...this has it all and so much more!
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:iconnereaya:
Nereaya Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2009  Hobbyist
It's beautiful.
Love girl =) Really like the face & hair <3
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:iconf-ayn-t:
F-AYN-T Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2009
thank you : 3
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Nereaya Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009  Hobbyist
You're welcome =)
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CiciTorvalds Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2009
I like it nice hand writing <3 :D:D:D ~tumbs up~ me new i need help on putting that pictures in the little box -_- if u know please tell me on my bage <3
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F-AYN-T Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009
what pictures in the little box? > A < I dont get it.
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:iconcicitorvalds:
CiciTorvalds Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009
the like ummm little picture that u see when u commet
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:iconf-ayn-t:
F-AYN-T Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2009
thumbnails? : O
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:iconcicitorvalds:
CiciTorvalds Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2009
im having a problem with putting my problem in my box
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InvizibleInk Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2009
ur poem is beautiful*tear*
and love ur drawing, goes well with the emotions!
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sagarathearchangel Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2009
you have such a beautifull style of shading i love the hair and if you dont mind me askin what do you fix on ps it looks so perfect
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:iconf-ayn-t:
F-AYN-T Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2009
hmmmm. its a very long process, but I usually adjust the brightness and contrast ^_^
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sagarathearchangel Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2009
O.o its amazing i always love pen ddrawings
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animangapyogirl Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
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i luv ur emotional works. they r indepthly excellent in showing ur feelings. they really show that u poured urself into them. *thumbs up* nice job.
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F-AYN-T Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
thanks a bunch :33
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:iconanimangapyogirl:
animangapyogirl Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
X3 No problem!
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dolphin64575 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
great poem, with fantastic art!
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xoQiQiox Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2009
Its good. Your not bad at poems.
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mrscullenblack1 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2009
Her life is so :-( and sh like that.
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"If we had happy endings, we'd all be under gravestones by now"
~Rosalie Hale- Eclipse- Chapter 7 Unhappy Ending page 154
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Iftearswerepennies Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2009
thats awesome:D
you dont suck at poems lol
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:iconteehee13:
teehee13 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
what do you mean you dont know how to make poems?
its better than what i usually do
its amazing
a beautiful poem
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:iconf-ayn-t:
F-AYN-T Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
thank you :33
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teehee13 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
ur welcome!
:heart:
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im-just-a-charater Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2009
this is my favourite
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raikimonducktape99 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2009
wow thats really good
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