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: This is her Story : by F-AYN-T : This is her Story : by F-AYN-T
LoL..thats her story. All in this one poem that I invented XD (it sucks yes I know..I dont really know how to make poems..:()
here's the poem (clearer version:XD:)

This is her Story

Selfishness, dishonesty,
this is the life I live with you..
Limping, crawling,
hear my heart it aches to be free..
You restrict me from the world,
you dampen my soul..
Every morning is pathetic,
every night is torture..
While I live everyday,
like a doll mishandled..
You just watch there,
but never know how I really feel..
Well I wouldn't complain,
this is the story of my life..
And everyday as I live by,
i'll wait for the day..
That you'll finally realize,
who I really Am.


yes this is teh poem :XD:
drawing:
time: waa I seriously dont know :XD:
tools: pencil and ballpen (as usual ;))
manipulated with cs ;P

© ~F-AYN-T
P L S C O M M E N T
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:iconstosphia:
The art work is pretty typical of the manga styles, shading is done well, something many manga artists skip on doing more than a suggestion of. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but her eyes look etched, rather than smooth and wet like typical eyes.

At the risk of being mean, your poem is kind of dry and I don't really feel like it speaks to your illustration. I'm also not really certain of what is being critique, so i'll also say this: the print face you use speaks volumes to the tonethat you're trying to convey to your user. I hope this helped :)
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I love it is amazing one of the best poems I had ever seen! I really love the art work it was a little hard to read but the plot made up for the writing.And I also love it becous I am a huge fan of your art as you can see my profile pitchure is coler burst. Overall the poem and the artwork was amazing I loved it! Oh and I disagree with all of the mean reveiws on this amazing poem and artwork! And I think the artwork went perfectly with the story!!!!!!!!! :iconiloveitplz: :iconblushplz: the poem was pretty amazing!!
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:icondontholdback:
i really do like the handwriting here. poems, i dont really understand though,(im not saying its bad or anything!!!) i just really love the handwriting
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:iconnathalierawr:
Uh this might be an old drawing but I think this poem is amazing, like lyrics from a song.
it's just...dunno. It sort of reached me, the style you wrote it in is very good n.n

/badenglishsorry/
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:iconpseudowitch:
Simple... powerful... and heart warming.
I held on to every word, wanting to embrace the small child, yearning to be noticed and loved for whom she truly is.
For those living a life like this... When you face a door closed shut before you, seek out an open window.
Well Done.
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My eyes have opened but they are obscured by my tears...
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Queen-Skye Apr 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
dude , this is kinda what im going through right now . and this actually helped me . thanks :)
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littlemsholmes1 Nov 23, 2011  Student General Artist
I think I am going to cry
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SkylerPennington Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, just, wow
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silvaze11223344 Sep 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
that is very toughing! ^^*tearjerker!*
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:iconfaerieheart:
The artwork is WONDERFUL!
The Poem is ... it touches my heart.
I've lived in her world.
I hope she is out of that life now.
:hug:
Huggles, Faerie
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FlatSpade Apr 16, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Good gracious, I LOVE IT!!! :)
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