This looks like a good try at perspective even though I don't really know if it's you first. Anyway, first I'd like to note that most things that are foreshortened don't seems to "shrink" at the same rate as others, for example the girls arm compared to her torso, the arm looks a lot smaller in proportion when compared to the shoulder level not to mention the pocky box is really tiny. Then the legs seem to be a lot smaller, and yes I know they farther back but they still seem to small to me. lol Then there's that book on her lap that seems to somehow manage to balance on it. XDDDD I think the chin of both girls seems to be too much to the side while I belive it should be more centered, not dead center, but not that far from it either. Either way I hope this is helpful in some way. owo
I think, for starters, I should say that this is not the best I have seen you do. But it is hard to pick and choose the critiques that I do. I do them based on whether the art makes me feel, And this does.
I think that this is a lovely seen, aesthetically, due to the simplicity of the theme, yet it is not under detailed and done in a way which is pleasing to the eye but not distracting of the main subjects. 3 out of 5 for Vision.
The scene also depicts believable characters engaged in a seemingly day to day activity, so nothing particularly special there; however you chose to approach it from a different angle than I would of expected, and have managed to fulfill foreground and background. The colours of their outfits are, however, very pleasing and work well with the emotional setting. With little details here and there which keep the eye entertained. 3.5 out of 5 for Originality, and 4 out of 5 for Impact.
Technique, with the proportions as they lead into the background went out the window, but it is hard to achieve this even for the most experienced artist, and you took a chance. Where you efforts really payed off was the tones of the colour, the delicate textures of a seemingly endless repertoire of fabrics. This and the gracefully executed detail and style of the grass blades and trees makes this a 4.5 out of 5 in terms of Technique.
Yeah, you're kinda right about the perspective being a little off, but in the grander scheme of things – and when it comes to art – appreciating the effort put in to make these kinds of work come through is a pleasurable reward in itself! CX
But let's not forget the praise and encouragement you get from others who see your work, that's another thing that keeps good artists such as yourself going!
About the color of the shirt, it's completely understandable that you were rushing, but on a critical note it does kind of contrast with the rest of the piece. However, that doesn't offset the picture as a whole, so it's all still good. On a side note though, you could take time off to make a few tweaks and touches on that particular spot.
Mixed media does tend to be messy when it comes to the finished product, and from looking at each and every individual aspect of the piece it seems more apparent to me. The striped blanket at the bottom, to me, seemed realistic enough on first glance, and that's a plus.
All in all, a good piece that may need a little touching up here and there. Though I have to admit I'm a sucker for art pieces involving short-haired girls with glasses and hairclips (and the real ones, too :3), so that's partially the reason why I was drawn to this piece.
So that's another plus for drawing me into this pic; keep up the good job, and keep improving! ~KazDom
Uwaa.. I'm not a good critic but the first thing I did notice was the red haired girl's body position, her arm and her small hand.
Her body's position is kinda awkward. If I were in her place, I'd probably be having a hard time doing that pose. Same goes for her arm. It's too close. If you could've just moved it more to the left. That would've given it a more "support" look. [I don't know if you got that. XP]
And I read some parts of the two critics you got for this. *Aiarashi's right. Some proportions are tiny. XD
The texture's really good. And I really like how you color your drawings.
..but still, I don't even know how to draw, haha! XP
I LOVE THIS FAYNT <3 Kyaaaah I think the perspective is really nice TTwTT <3 I don't know why but my favorite part is the yellow jacket and how you colored it... Looks so real to me hahaha! <3 GOOD LUCK ON THE CONTEST!! And college lol Weeee ~
It's a lovely picture. The only problem is the bodies- they're a bit disproportional. I'd submit a critique but I'm not subscribed XD sooo really, that's the only problem. I absolutely love the girl with the pocky in her mouth. Great hear, I adore the eyes. The upper body is good too. I hope this helps in some way, I'm not half as good as you are, you probably know more than me anyway.